Getting Married!  Whooooo!!!

My nine year old sister wrote this story, is it good?

Me and Ashley skipped down the road. We headed toward our house. Ashley and I are twins. I have golden blond hair down to my waist. Ashley’s hair is down to
her shoulders. We both have green eyes and barley see-able freckles. " Cristy, Happy Birthday." Said Ashley to me. I rolled my eyes but smiled. Today was her
Birthday TOO. " Right back a’cha." I called as she ran ahead of me. I started to ran to catch up. She was already on our porch. She opened the screen door and
stopped. Ashley waited for me. I got there fast, I have to say, I am a pretty fast runner. Ashley opened the door, "Oh!!" I said, startled. "What?" asked Ashley as she
stepped inside. " My bag! I must have dropped it. Look! It’s down the street on the sidewalk, I need to get it, inside it has my 20$!!!" I started down the sidewalk when
I herd Ashley call," Hurry!" Then I herd the door shut with a ‘SLAM’. I hurried down the street, but tripped. My head landed with a ‘CLONK’. "oh!" I grumbled.
"Ow." I said scrambling to my feet. My eyes widened and I steped back. A pale girl with brown hair down to her knees stood in front of me. I gasped. "Are you all
right?" The girls squeaky voice was unbearable to my ears. "Y-yes f-f-fine." I snapped. " Um, I was just going to get my bag." The girl held up a purple bag with a picture
of my favorite band on it. "This?" she asked. "Yes." I said I grabbed it from her. I turned around. I guess I was kinda mad, I really don’t know why. So I turned around
to say thank you, but the girl was gone. I glanced back one more time and ran home. I wasn’t going to tell my mom or dad or my brothers about what happened.
I wasn’t even going to tell Ashley, who I tell EVERYTHING to. When I stepped inside a smile drifted to my face. It was warm. Really warm. I looked on the ceiling
withch was covered with birthday balloons. I stepped into the living room, where I found, mom,dad,and my two brothers,Jack and Seth. I glanced at the table,
on the table I saw the biggest cake I had ever seen. "Happy 12th Birthday!" Everyone yelled at once. I couldn’t help but smile. "Where’s the second birthday girl?" I
asked with a wide grin. "I think that’s her now, everyone, HIDE!" whispered my Dad. My dad has Black hair, and I have to say he’s pretty handsome. I see why my mom
fell for him. My mom, has blond hair and freckles like me and Ashley. Everyone had hid in the good places, I didn’t have time to hide, Ashley had already stepped in
the room. I WAS the birthday girl too, so I decided to act like I didn’t know what was going on, I am a pretty good actress. " Oh hi A-" "SURPRISE!" Everyone but
ME yelled at once. At the part when everyone was yelling, "RISE!" My arms shot up in the air and I helped finish the sentience. "SE!" Then something occurred to me.
"Why didn’t you guys hide when I was coming?" I asked kinda disappointed, kind of fine, and didn’t care. "Honey, you have quiet feet. You know that." Said my mom
glancing down and my feet. I slumped forward even though I didn’t care. "I’ve got a surprise for you two!" cooed mom. "You and Ashley are going to a camp
by a farm, Ashley I know how much you love animals and Chrisy I know how much you like camps!!!" My eyes bulged. "Tell me about the camp." I asked.
"Well, like I told you it’s a short walk from a farm. It has a huge lake where you can swim, water ski, and much more, they have cabins, and a bunch of other fun stuff!"
I sighed, but I made it a happy sigh even though I was disappointed. I DID love camps, but that was when I was 8, 9 and 10. Now I’m more fond of the mall pizza places
and movie theaters. I like expensive stuff, not the woods and mud. I don’t like bugs anymore, and I’m not a total freak that loves amimals and the outdoors.Nope
not anymore. I mean I love maybe a little or medium size dog, not huge dogs that slobber all over, I am a cat lover, but I guess I still love dogs. My expression
changed when I saw the brochure. It had a picture of a painted red and blue cabin made out of wood, and I thought wow. Then I flipped the page and saw the lake,
ew! It was green! I love to swim in the ocean, but that green looked like the color of, barf! okay, I was overreacting a bit, it’s just ever since I met my cousin Della
I’ve been so pampered. I got it from her, she was totally rich, she got me a manicure and a pedicure and we went to the movies, we went to the mall. Anyway, I thought
for a moment, then I smiled and thanked my mom, for the rest of the day was nonstop eating and showering over me and Ashley. I mean wow, they have never loved
me so much in my life! Well, I know why, It was out Golden birthday. That’s why my mom about us the worst-I mean BEST summer of out lives, and that’s not all,the
picture I saw of the cabin, was our cabins, all the other cabins are just normal wood and much smaller, and the windows are just holes cut into the cabin, with super
thin screens. Our windows have glass over them. Of course we had bunk mates. Mom
It’s much longer, but Yahoo cut it off because it was too long! Later I’ll post the rest, so if you want to know the rest, just keep me in the back of your mind and check now and again, don’t worry it won’t take a month maybe about 2 to 7 days…
And ‘Listen To Me’, the beginning may not be good but it gets really better far in the story. Jerk…

It’s way cute!

Just an idea: I bet you could help her put together a children’s book. I bet she’s have fun drawing/or picking out the pictures for the book… and make it a short story or something. 2nd-5th graders really like those type of books, and pictures make it that much better!

Tell her to keep writing!